question:How do we self-motivate ourselves?
original
In my opinion I think it is going to be very good for me to have an extra hour at school just for doing homework because when I go back I get distracted by the things in my room very easily. Things like the bed, my gaming computer, walking takes my homework time just in seconds. Unlike school, they are less things that can distract me which means that I can actually get my work done. To me, I think that this would get my grades a lot better and not having my parents talk to me every single day about my grades. I have tried doing homework after school and most of the time I have succeeded to focus on my work. To some people, they might find working in their rooms more comfortable to work but whenever I get comfortable I get sleepy and tend to get sidetracked really easy. I think not being able to be in a comfortable spot makes it really easy for me to focus on school work. I think that my room is a place where I get to relax which means no stress and the closest thing I can do to forcing myself to do homework in my room is to come downstairs, put my earphones on, and start working. This topic seems like a really debatable topic because a lot of the people in my class seems to have separated ideas about it.
revised
I believe us humans can motivate ourselves by disciplining ourselves in any way possible. Which is why I believe doing homework as soon as I’m done with school is the best way to self-motivate myself. As I enter my room, my mind and body loosens up, which leads me to procrastinate and stay unmotivated perpetually if I allow myself to do so. In particular, my bed and gaming computer lead to me to distracting thoughts. In a regimented environment like school it is quite easy to focus; as there are virtually no distractions and forces us to not loosen up. It is a great way to keep ourselves extrinsically motivated. In my opinion, there should be a certain level of comfort in order to accomplish tasks which we are not intrinsically motivated at. Although each individual is different, it is a universal consensus that we need discipline to succeed in life. No matter what the our endeavor, environment, or situation is, it all first comes from inward behavior. Change your perspective, keep a positive mind, and decide on what you want to accomplish at. Just decide. A well known quote goes like this. “Pain is temporary. It may last a minute, or an hour, or a day, or a year, but eventually it will subside and something else will take its place. If I quit, however, it lasts forever” (Lance Armstrong). The day you can self-motivate yourself, is the day your life starts.
Essay
Niki’s exemplary work manifests the importance of disciplining yourself in order the accomplish many things in life. An exemplary work is a praiseworthy and a quintessential piece of writing. Niki successfully conveyed his message through his articulate writing and powerful choices of words. Moreover, his organization of the writing was primary reason I picked his writing over the others.
I believe many ideas in his free writing is exemplary. Niki specifically mentioned that in his life right now that he had to finish his homework in order the succeed. Essentially you have to learn have to prioritize in your life. Not only is it relevant to our lives, but it also allows us to go through a stage of introspection. Although the ideas in his freewriting were exemplary, the essay was quite weak and also lacked attention to detail.The writing was amateur and lacked a focus point. However I thought with good revision, is it possible to amplify the already good points and bury the bad points of the writing. I was able to see his points through the clouds. It was a topic I was genuinely interested in, therefore I wanted to revise it so a wider range of audience could be exposed to his ideas.
I believe my semi-revised work has drastically improved Niki’s exemplary work filled with untapped potential. Niki often focused on the specifics too much, and his writing was too revolved around his experiences and personal life. I tried to retain the specifics he mentioned while revising his writing into a more general and practical writing that can be applied to the so-to-speak real world. There is also a clear change with the vocabulary used and more varied sentence structures. I also added a quote in order the make the writing powerful. Often times, we focus on points that are derived from our ‘The world revolves around me’ perspective so-to-speak. By adding outside sources the writing became more universal and credible.
Not only did I learn a lot from reading his writing, but I also learned a lot from my revision of NIki’s essay. It was definitely enlightening to see how your mental state can affect your performance in your life. I also learned how to create a powerful writing from others mistakes. I firmly believe, especially have after this project, that collaborating with others (which I did in this project), is one of the best and efficient ways of writing.
Throughout the whole process of revising and reflecting, I learned several irreplaceable lessons. With writing, no matter how great it is, there is always room for improvement. We have to continuously seek for better ways to improve the writing, which usually requires certain degree of outside support. My revised version of Niki’s is definitely not perfect, since the work can always be refined. However the writing has improved dramatically while retaining the essence and formula of the original writing.
I believe many ideas in his free writing is exemplary. Niki specifically mentioned that in his life right now that he had to finish his homework in order the succeed. Essentially you have to learn have to prioritize in your life. Not only is it relevant to our lives, but it also allows us to go through a stage of introspection. Although the ideas in his freewriting were exemplary, the essay was quite weak and also lacked attention to detail.The writing was amateur and lacked a focus point. However I thought with good revision, is it possible to amplify the already good points and bury the bad points of the writing. I was able to see his points through the clouds. It was a topic I was genuinely interested in, therefore I wanted to revise it so a wider range of audience could be exposed to his ideas.
I believe my semi-revised work has drastically improved Niki’s exemplary work filled with untapped potential. Niki often focused on the specifics too much, and his writing was too revolved around his experiences and personal life. I tried to retain the specifics he mentioned while revising his writing into a more general and practical writing that can be applied to the so-to-speak real world. There is also a clear change with the vocabulary used and more varied sentence structures. I also added a quote in order the make the writing powerful. Often times, we focus on points that are derived from our ‘The world revolves around me’ perspective so-to-speak. By adding outside sources the writing became more universal and credible.
Not only did I learn a lot from reading his writing, but I also learned a lot from my revision of NIki’s essay. It was definitely enlightening to see how your mental state can affect your performance in your life. I also learned how to create a powerful writing from others mistakes. I firmly believe, especially have after this project, that collaborating with others (which I did in this project), is one of the best and efficient ways of writing.
Throughout the whole process of revising and reflecting, I learned several irreplaceable lessons. With writing, no matter how great it is, there is always room for improvement. We have to continuously seek for better ways to improve the writing, which usually requires certain degree of outside support. My revised version of Niki’s is definitely not perfect, since the work can always be refined. However the writing has improved dramatically while retaining the essence and formula of the original writing.